Sleeping Valor

Yuppers. It's short. But very beautiful. ^_^ I have no help for you, except to say that though this style is lovely, don't write the whole story like this. I ...

I think I liked the Hobbit best, of his books. Also, I must stop myself from reading the books first, because I got pissed of in the second movie when ...

*stamps with Keek's official 'will read' stamp* Yes, so I am coming back to this story finally. =P Sorry for the long delay. It's late here, though, so I am ...

*stamps with the official 'to be critiqued' stamp* :D As usual, I have not the time this instant, but I will be coming back for this story this weekend! It ...

I got my science test back today. It was a Biology test . Just wondering why you don't just say: 'I got my biology test back today'? And ,[add a ...

I begged silently for it to awaken .[period] Just then, a voice within me whispered tauntingly from a recess of my mind .[period, r maybe colon?] Silly, silly Troy .[period] ...

Fear me, because I think I understand but I suspect I don't. Does Artemis Fowl count? Magical realism is as a type of genre in which illogical scenarios regularly occur ...

Who even dares vote anything but vampire? They are too awesome! XD Also, methinks this isn't poetry. Unless it's the most story-like free verse I have ever seen in my ...

Hola! So, why no one told me I'd forgotten to come back here, I do not know. Apparently the little guy sitting on my shoulder who reminds me to do ...

The silver moon drifted across the dawning sky. Is it the sky that's dawning, or the sun? I think it's a lovely phrase, but because I am being all critical ...

lol. But isn't George...like 17 when she first arrives in Corus. *counts* o_O He shouldn't be more than 7 years older than her! >_> lol. Now I'll have to go ...

*twitch* What he said. Please put another return between your paragraphs (o_O is that whole long block of text at the beginning one paragraph? If so, please for the love ...

Wow. I think this is the first time I've read a story written in present tense with a first person POV. Cool. You have a nice writing style, and you ...

Trickster's choice was good. I loved all of Tamora's Tortall books (I have a shelf just for them ^_^). Hmm...but let me see if I can remember the plot. Hope ...

Mwaha. ^_^ Okies. I actually thought this was pretty good. You've presented a rather interesting (if depressed =P) character here who obviously has a cool history. You could do a ...